Tuesday, February 07, 2012

I Love a Man in Uniform

In today's Bizarro panel, I imagine an alternate career in law enforcement.
My submission sketch is composed very differently from Dan Piraro's published art.
Once again, Dan's changes improved on the sketch and really delivered the gag. The two viewers are completely unnecessary. They'd be required if they were commenting on the image on the TV, but in this case, they serve no purpose. It wasn't even necessary to show a television. The gag idea was a good one, but this sketch has too much clutter and detracts from the joke's impact.

Dan's version is direct, funny and much, much better. The reader becomes the TV viewer. We've all seen so many newsreaders in front of a graphic, that we immediately recognize the scene. The published version emphasizes the differences between the three-dimensional, realistically-rendered newsman and the exaggerated, cartoonish burglar figure. The rejiggered composition also allowed Dan to show the burglar at a much larger size. Nicely done, Mister Piraro!

Please steal a peek at our previous collaborations.  

By the way, the title of this blog post was itself stolen.

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